I will try to develop better skill at making villains and antagonists and continue writing

  BUT if you know of some writer that can write this story better then i do, please let them read this story a bit and give me a link to they're story

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  it has to be developer console cheat (power almost equal to god)

  I think i like reading better then writing :-(